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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in Englnad and Wales between and 2011.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in Englnad and Wales between and 2011.
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The table shows
demonstrates
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 information about the
household
 owning and renting
accommodation
 in England and Whales
1918
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from 1918
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 to 2011.The data is measured in
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
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the household
a household
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household
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households
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.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 people first lived
households
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in households
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 in Rented
Accommodation
. After that ,they began to choose households in Owned
Accommodation
. Living to Owned
Accommodation
 and Rented
Accommodation
 followed upward and downward trends respectively over the period shown. Looking at the details, in 1918, people lived around 22 %
households
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of households
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 in Owned
Accommodation
.
This
 table
to
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hit a peak of 70 in 2001.
Last
 decade Owned
Accommodation
 decreased a little bit. Remarkably,
Household
 in
Rended
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Rented
Accommodation
 was to hit a peak of between 70-80 in
starter
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the starter
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 year.After years ,
this
 table downward dramatically.In 1971,the same figure was familiar to 50.
Household
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Households
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 in
Accommodation
 was to reach the lowest point after 3-decade.
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