"Criminals commit crimes as soon as they are released from prisons. What are the causes of this? What are the effects?"

There are increasing trends of committed crimes all around the world. These are sometimes linked to the tendency of ex-
criminals
,
engaging
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into
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crime deeds again as soon as they are released from
jails
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jail
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.
While
society
can be considered as a prime cause for
this
, subsequent effects of causes are inevitable. There are a number of reasons why
criminals
take up their "old" habit despite having time spent imprisoned. One of them is
rejection
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a rejection
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of
society
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the society
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they are in. All too often,
criminals
, after getting released, are seen to be inappropriate and are rejected by the side of
society
.
This
is because they are seen to be out of social norms and seen as
hostiles
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hostile
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to people.
Thus
, in case ex-
criminals
look for jobs and try to get into social life, they are separated and looked down
.
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Thus
, they have no option but to commit crimes again owing to having no other choice
to
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but to
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make a living.
In addition
, they might feel a bit difficult to adapt to the new environment, which was formed during their time in prison. Difficulties in adaptation might possibly lead them to behave in a way they used to. These have consequences
to
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the
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society
and
criminals
. As for
society
, it becomes more hostile towards ex-
criminals
.
Not to mention
their label as segregated members, they start being
overly-hated
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overly hated
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;
this
leads to a concrete rejection of them from
the
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whole social life. As for
criminals
, they might get their second trial and get into prison again.
This
makes them lose their years of life and simply ruin
best
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the best
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moments. In conclusion, the tendency of
criminals
getting
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into a crime path again is caused by social rejection and challenges in adaptation to norms that exist.
Effects
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The effects
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are highly negative for both
criminals
and
community
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the community
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they live in.
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