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The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart indicates how the percentage of citizens who are older than 4 years old like
radio
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 and television shows in a whole day in 1992 in the UK.
Overall
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, it can be seen that British
audiences
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 generally liked to
listen
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tolisten
show examples
radio
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 in the morning.
In contrast
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, television shows were more popular, especially, in the evening.
Radio
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 companies operated at 6:00 am with about 7% of British
listening
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tolistening
show examples
 them.
After
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this
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, the
number
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 of
audiences
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 increased significantly and reached a peak of about 25% after 8:00 am.
On the other hand
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, there was no any people watch
TV
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 shows at 6:00 am. Even at the morning period, the
number
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 of
audiences
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 had been kept under 10%. After 8:00 am, the
audiences
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 started to turn off their
radio
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, and the
number
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 of them decrease slightly for the rest of that day.
However
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, the proportion of
TV
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 viewers rose and overtook
radio
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 listeners at 1:00 pm. At 4:00 pm, there is an immense increase of the
number
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 of
TV
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audiences
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, and
finally
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 it climbed up to the peak about 45% at 8:00 pm. But after that time of point, it dropped sharply. Both
TV
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 and
radio
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audiences
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 reminded just 3% at midnight 2:00 am.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words radio, audiences, number, tv with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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