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News channels only give good news on publications. Do you agree or disagree

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The phenomenon of the national
news
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 reported by traditional
news
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media
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 that tend to support the
government
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 rather than reveal the truth has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as people's views on
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 issue in question may be, I totally agree that in
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 sight of view. Of all reasons why many people believe that traditional
news
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media
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 side with the
government
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, probably the most significant one is that
a
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massive
evidances
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evidence
evidences
 have been uploaded to
internet
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the internet
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 and share
to
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public
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the public
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.
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, with
the
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rapidly
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 technological development, mobile
phone
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phones
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 and social
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 become
a the
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 essential tools among humans.
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, most people will use their
phone
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phones
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 to record
anythings
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anything
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 they see and upload
to
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it to
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 their
media
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 apps when they saw
somethings
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something
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that is
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 abnormal.
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, those videos become concrete proof that proves
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 channels are
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a liar
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liar
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. Another reason that should not be overlooked is that the context announced by the
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channesls
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channels
 always
support
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 the
government
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's views in some sensationalism.
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, the evidence used in
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 announcements often proved that processed
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 in order to simulate the same situation as the
government
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's claim even if the original copy has been shared on the internet. So, it is
obviously
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 the new channels
is
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 helping the
government
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 to control the information spreading. Under
this
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 line of thinking, it seems to me that
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proof
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proofs
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shown
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 that
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 channels spreading wrong information in turn support the
government
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's decision.
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, I completely agree that traditional
news
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media
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 only publishing the
news
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 would benefit
to
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the
government
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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