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communications between managers and workers are important, other people said that other factors are more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#communications #managers #workers #people #factors
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On the first
hand
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 we have
safely
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 transport, which practice by humanity
many
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 years and which
transformation
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 from early rank our history,
history
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the history
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 of
first
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the first
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 people on Earth
,
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 because we want to ride speedily and want to transfer even more things and only
car
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cars
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 can use for these goals.
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 four wheels
is
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 banal and your brain craves more extreme, more knifelike feels, which never happened with cars,
therefore
 we
has
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 constructed
motorcycle
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a motorcycle
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. Again all stopped on our visibility on life, on your requirements, because
the
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first society
nuts
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 about risks and some kind of separation from reality, and second society love measured, calm. If I
going
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 to some places,
then
 I would take the car, because long travel in
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the mountain
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mountain
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 and other
hard to reach
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 corners of the world is my all, and
motorcycle
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 absolutely will not fit.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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