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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Experts have hotly debated the issue of
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.Many
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 reckon that
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people
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believe
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 that
ministry
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 of
country
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the country
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 ought to keep the
salary
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salary
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 to depend on
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 done by
people
 regardless
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 certain limits.Let us examine both views before reaching a concrete decision. On the first hand,the theme of equality and justice remains relevant to
this
 day all over the planet.The viewers say that we should keep
exactly
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 for all individuals definite scale of
salary
.Because the supporters and activists claim government give
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 of equality between country.And they take
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 strategy from USSR
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 century.
There
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 all
people
 live identically and keep
evenly
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 economic strategy.They
had
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worked 6-8
hours
 per day and earned only 100-150 dollars each month,but there are prices were
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 to all other products on
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.Interestingly that many
people
 think that
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time.
On the other hand
,experts elaborate that the amount of
salary
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 on times of
work
 done
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 week, level of intellect and degree of education level.
This
 is
uncorrect
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incorrect
 when someone who works 8
hours
 per day with
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 degree, earns equally to
other person
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another person
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 who has
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an associate
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 degree and works 4
hours
everyday
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.If activists organize propaganda for
such
 a scheme, it will be a very stupid idea without any clear evidence.Nowadays,I believe that the
governmen
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government
 honestly and accurately
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 the value of every hour of
work
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a
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quantity
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 of
work
hours
.The bright example
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this
 opinion is the USA and the UK.British and
american
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people
 can be steadily developed because of their economic way on capitalism In conclusion,I believe that
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 can leave an assumption about different economic strategies of the world in
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • incentivize
  • discrepancy
  • inequality
  • social cohesion
  • equitable distribution
  • wealth concentration
  • talent retention
  • global competitiveness
  • social unrest
  • innovate
  • government intervention
  • salary cap
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