Some people advocate the death penalty for those who committed violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society.Describe the advantages and disadvantages of the death penalty and give your opinion.

Today we are going to talk about a controversial topic among the government and the people of
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society, which is the
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own benefits and drawbacks, and we are here to give our thoughts about execution and talk about both
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side's
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of view. The
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own supporters and people who have always been against
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law. The
death
penalty
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and in Islamic
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death
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countries
, like The European Union, The United Kingdom and Canada. Some
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and territories execute criminals who are a big threat to the society and environment,
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have the worst criminal records a person could have, like serial killers, terrorists and mass murderers. In the case of planned or purposeful murder, the
death
penalty
could be a better option than imprisonment for life, because if the murderer somehow was able to break out of the prison and start committing
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, terror, or promoting violence;
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they could cause big troubles in where they go and increase crime index in a city or district.
Although
, if the polices are professionally trained,
then
they may get arrested quickly and cause less harm.
However
, there are disadvantages to the
death
penalty
as well.
everybody
is a human being after all and
everybody
has the right to live, without taking their life, by force.
everybody
should be treated with kindness and generosity, because believe it or not, every person deserves a second chance to find themselves, figure out what issues they have caused and face the consequences of their actions. Even the person with the most crime records can change their mind and reform their selves. Personally, I am more against the idea of execution, because it has more disadvantages than advantages in my opinion, and
everybody
should be given time to find their true selves, in order to develop for the good of our society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advocates
  • Capital punishment
  • Contemporary society
  • Violent crimes
  • Deterrence
  • Retribution
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Imprisonment
  • Innocent
  • Unethical
  • Inhumane
  • Misuse
  • Legal systems
  • Heinous crimes
  • Closure
  • Moral concerns
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