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Some people think that cooking food at home is a waste of time. They think that fast food restaurants have made our life easier and less stressful. To what extent do you agree?

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Looking at society , some people are commenting about
home
 cooking, is a waste of time and on another hand,they mentioned ,saying ,having
food
 from restaurants made their life easier and less stressful. In my opinion,I personally, admire,rather than having,
meals
 from restaurants ,we mainly,prefer to have
home
 cooking.Thinking about lives being easier and less stressful and having
meals
 from a restaurant won't be able to help us to have a healthy
lifestyle
. Morely,If we mentally adapted to cooking
meals
 at
home
 we can have a healthy
lifestyle
. Adding, more ,
for
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 cooking
meals
 ,at
home
 can waste our precious time but
this
 can lead to having a healthy,
lifestyle
.
Firstly
,mentioning having ,
meals
 from fast
food
 restaurants can give us peace and a less stressful life.But
this
 will cause many issues with people's health. we read an article that day-to-day ninety-nine per cent of people
are
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 caused by blood sugar and many more diseases.
Secondly
,cooking
food
 at
home
 will be much better rather than, having
meals
 ,from a hotel
due to
 the health issues,
than
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that
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 can occur from having
food
 from outside.
Overall
,Having
meals
 at
home
 is much better than having
food
 at hotels .To have a healthy
lifestyle
 it's better to have
home
meals
 even though it wastes your time.
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