the chart below shows the percentage of household in owned and rented acommodation in england and waves between 1918-2011

the chart below shows the percentage of household in owned and rented acommodation in england and waves between 1918-2011
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The bar graphs illustrate data for the no. of owned households and rented accommodation in 2 countries England and Wales 9
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from 1918 – 2011. The information is represented in percentage form.
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, it suggests that the descending no. of rented houses from the initial
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to the end senilities.
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, there was ascending no. of owned houses from the early
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to the late ones. The percentage of rented houses gradually decreased ranging from almost 76%in 1918, remaining somewhat 68% for 2
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(1939 and 1953),about 59% in 1961,50% in the year 1971,40% for the next in 1981, nearly 32% in 1991, somewhat 32% in 2001 and a bit higher in 2011 with approx. of 36%. On the other ,hand the owned ones have different counting for the respective
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firstly
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for 1918 (close to 23%), 1939 and 1953 were equal with (around 32%), 1961 (nearly 41%),1971 (50%), 1981 with (60%),1991 about (68%) figures remained almost same for the next two
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ie; 1991 (67%) and 2001 (68%) and
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2011 a bit lower in no. than the previous generation with approx. (64%).
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