Currently, there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best, these methods are ineffective, and at worst, they may be dangerous. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

In our daily lifetime, being ill for
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in our life. By the way,
while
many
people
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medicine
by
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, many more
people
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the
alternative
treatment and trust them
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can have numerous upshots for their health. In
this
topic a completely agree with the statement.
To begin
with, the
alternative
forms of medication are based on the
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achievement
achievements
of ancestors’ past. Religion, tradition and superstition have been already appearing in any aspects of our life. It’s not just affected in
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human society but
also
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the medical
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too. By distorting some of the
primative
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primitive
treatments which are already distorted,
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of
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methods
had
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without any
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proof. Because of that, using these doubted
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of
medicine
isn’t seem to be a good idea. To elaborate
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, many
people
using
alternative
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methods
can undergo the disease not because they are using these forms of
alternative
medicine
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therefore
, their genes, their good health, or even their placebo effect. The most reliable proof
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that
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is the covid 19 disease that just happened
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about 2 years ago. In the period the disease was
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spreading
speeding
speaking
, the number of
people
who had
this
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constantly
increading
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increasing
each day.
While
somebody could return to their normal life much earlier, many
people
could be
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healed
with an incredible speed just by eating and
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a rest. It simply
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that
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genes and other body functions can help an individual heal fastly with undoubted effects. In conclusion, the argument between two different types of
medicine
is really frightening. It
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the methods that you fully investigate and understand,
however
, we need to have
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trust
on
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the
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modern treatment because
it’ve
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I’ve
saved plentiful
lifes
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lives
.
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