Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects at universities in many countries. Why is this? What effect does this have on society?

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Universities around the world are facing an issue that they are having scientific subjects
less
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selected.
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my own perspective, I would express that
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is developing negative consequences for society. In my first
view point
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, why are there so many people quitting science-related careers? Undoubtedly, the science curriculum is hard, not only does it require the learner to have an excellent way of thinking but
also
a good and well-developed memory. As working in investigating, technological fields, etc. Students need to work with numbers and have to do experiments and log in
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lab for hours. Which involves great passion.
Furthermore
, the graduates might find it difficult to find a well-paid job. In order to have an experimental project approved and funded, scientists must promote to the investors its commercial
potentials
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potential
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, or be listed
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the
prioritzed
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prioritized
governmental policies so that they can receive maintenance fees from the government.
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the lack of human resources in scientific areas leads to inconsistent growth of
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the social
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community. Definitely, if
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people chose science subjects in university, worker shortages would occur. There will be no scientists who work on technologies and inventions. Without those
science
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researches
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, it probably leads to
economic
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the economic
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downturn,
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lack
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a lack
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of proper manufacturing machines reduces industrial productivity.
On the other hand
, society might encounter bad health care. As no one would do research and find
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a cure
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cure
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cures
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for diseases, create vaccines. Eventually, People can not access
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good health services and exact
diagnosis
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diagnoses
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.
To sum up
, the state of
less student
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fewer students
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choose
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to learn
scientific
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the scientific
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curriculum in many countries will
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a global issue in many
aspecs
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areas
of life.
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