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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always good. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others,
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, think that change is always good. Discuss both views and give your opinion. In the contemporary world, there are certain lifestyles where, some individuals prefer to live their
life
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 without any change,
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contrast
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 others would rather have a diverse mode of
life
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. In my way of thinking, I am in
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 of trying
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cutting-edge things in order to progress and learn more.
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 with, experiencing alteration is
inevitable
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 process throughout the whole
life
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.
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, there are a proportion of inhabitants, who
are not adopt
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 any
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 changes
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 and prefer to stay in their comfort zone, to have a
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similarly
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 daily routine. there might be
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 of frustration belong with adjustment to new conditions. To illustrate,
employee
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employees
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they
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might be promoted and move to
other city
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another city
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. Adapting to recent coworkers,
environment
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and environment
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to
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 some
human-beings
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human beings
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 might be arduous, and lead to stress.
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advance
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 of cycle daily
succor
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 to sharpen skills and bring confidence in that specific procedure.
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, everything
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 we have now, and will have in the future result
of
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evolve
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 and progress, which needed constant changes
as
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in our mindsets,
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in transition
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overall
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. New discoveries
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a
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 possibility to lead to broaden horizon, encounter with the claim, that everything is possible.
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, one decade before, no one believed
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 electric vehicles aside from Elon Mask. After his creation, all human beings
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, and start to manufacture them
by
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own
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their own
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 fabric. In a nutshell, some residents
satisfied
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are satisfied
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 with their simple and comfortable
life
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,
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, avoiding any alterations.
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, for modernization, it is necessary to recognize and promote new amendments.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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