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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always good. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others,
however
, think that change is always good. Discuss both views and give your opinion. In the contemporary world, there are certain lifestyles where, some individuals prefer to live their
life
 without any change,
in
contrast
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 others would rather have a diverse mode of
life
. In my way of thinking, I am in
favor
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 of trying
a
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cutting-edge things in order to progress and learn more.
To begin
 with, experiencing alteration is
inevitable
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 process throughout the whole
life
.
However
, there are a proportion of inhabitants, who
are not adopt
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 any
hugely
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 changes
,
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 and prefer to stay in their comfort zone, to have a
similarly
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 daily routine. there might be
advance
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 of frustration belong with adjustment to new conditions. To illustrate,
employee
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employees
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they
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might be promoted and move to
other city
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. Adapting to recent coworkers,
environment
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and environment
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to
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 some
human-beings
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 might be arduous, and lead to stress.
Although
advance
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 of cycle daily
succor
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 to sharpen skills and bring confidence in that specific procedure.
Conversely
, everything
what
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 we have now, and will have in the future result
of
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evolve
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 and progress, which needed constant changes
as
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in our mindsets,
as
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in transition
in
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overall
. New discoveries
has
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a
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 possibility to lead to broaden horizon, encounter with the claim, that everything is possible.
For instance
, one decade before, no one believed
into
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 electric vehicles aside from Elon Mask. After his creation, all human beings
convinced
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, and start to manufacture them
by
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own
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their own
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 fabric. In a nutshell, some residents
satisfied
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are satisfied
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 with their simple and comfortable
life
,
therefore
, avoiding any alterations.
However
, for modernization, it is necessary to recognize and promote new amendments.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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