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The typical teaching situation of a teacher and students in the class will not exist by the year 2050. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that there is a typical teaching situation of a teacher and
students
 in the class will not exist by the year 2025.
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 essay I will discuss the advantages of traditional teaching. On the one hand, traditional teaching is more
effectiveness
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of
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students
. It ensures that
students
 must attend the lesson to learn knowledge. Teachers ask a question during the lesson which
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students
 need to answer immediately and without checking in online. It confirms
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the learning progress of
students
.
For instance
,
students
 are able to find the teacher after the lesson when they
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the
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difficulties. Teachers can solve
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problems instantly.
Thus
, traditional teaching
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no longer result in unnecessary waste of time.
On the other hand
, classic teaching covers the ways of life. A school is a small zoom out of society. In a school, teachers do not just give subject
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 to
students
 and
also
 teach the
children
study
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communicate
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 with each
others
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.
students
 learn how to socialize,
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 new friends and
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aspect
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 to possibly respond in the future.
For example
,
school
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 stage is very important
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children
 which is
develop
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a
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communication
skill
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 to avoid the
children
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 autistic.
A
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 educator may find the
children
 has
problem
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 and solve the problem in the early
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.
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, classic teaching is help
children
to
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develop social skills. In conclusion, traditional teaching will exist in the future. It is more
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 and helpful to
students
 learning.
Therefore
, I agree that classic learning
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 by the year 2050.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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