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increment
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in
population
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the population
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cities
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cities
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increment
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population
development of Add an article
the population
cities
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have
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contain
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attract
people
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cities
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towns
people
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the most
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and gardens
a
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apply
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project
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economy to the country.
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must build with more facilities
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structures
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and highway
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highways
government
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governments
be spend
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spend
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society Correct article usage
apply
think
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thinks
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on
facilities
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healthcare
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and healthcare
people
by issuing free medical or stationary to school kids. This
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concerned
the
earning.
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opening
it
made Correct pronoun usage
they
people
life easier and smooth.Change noun form
people's
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