Some fell that cities should be designed to be beautiful while others feel their functionality is more important

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In the modern world
incresment
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increment
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population
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can be seen very easily.
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development
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the development
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of
cities
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became
major
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problem. Some folks claim that
cities
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should be organized to be more beautiful
while
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others
saying
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say
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more
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the more
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important part is
facilities
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to
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the community. In
this
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essay
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ill discuss both views and show my
opining
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opening
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in upcoming paragraphs.
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, the
incresment
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increment
of
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in
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population
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the population
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development of
cities
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gaining problematic day by day.
These
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has
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to
be contain
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contain
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not only beautiful
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duration. Beautiful places
attracts
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more
people
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.
Main
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concern about building some
cities
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or
town
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towns
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is to attract
people
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most
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the most
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.
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Burj Kalifa, in Dubai. Thousands of tourist
site
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seen
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have seen
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this
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tower without fail. The charismatic’s buildings,
gardens
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and gardens
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fountains can be seen as
a
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apply
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projects
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project
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of development.
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, the attraction brings
good
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a good
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economy to the country.
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, some folks keep saying
cities
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must build with more
facilities
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rather than look. Some
cities
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have developed
to structure
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structures
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with poor
facilities
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.
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example
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more shopping
complex
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complexes
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, hospitals,
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and highway
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highway
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highways
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should come first. Some
government
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governments
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tend to
be spend
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spend
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more money rather than claim attraction to be built on functionality.
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,
the
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apply
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society
think
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their own money which government collect as a tax, need to spend
for
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on
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more
facilities
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especially
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on education,
healthcare
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and healthcare
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. Giving some relief to the
people
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by issuing free medical or stationary to school kids.
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helps parents for less
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about
the
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apply
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earning. In conclusion. No about
attractive
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the attractive
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look. Attraction is mandatory,
however
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, there
need
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more
focused
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focus
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on the
fictional
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fiction
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despite of look. In my
opining
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opening
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factions are more important than attractiveness
it
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they
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made
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people
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life easier and smooth.

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