Some people believe that experience children has before they go to school will have the greatest effect on their future life. Other argue that experience gained when they are teenagers’ bas a bigger influence

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kids has to deal with lots of problems with or without
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. Some people think the
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influential in the future
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think
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gain
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achievements in
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both viewpoints I personally agree with the former
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the following reason.
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teenagers
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experience
at school or
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determined
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more than a
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. Vast knowledge of dealing with people,
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slowing skills are mainly
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in
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if a
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can identify the proper world community better than a
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in their
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mostly the suitable age they turn to be good.
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society think the
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from their primary stages of
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behavioral
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patterns. And
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stories as a kid will achieve to solve the problem
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the famous people how the act when
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certain things come. They intend to claim learning these will influence a
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better one day.
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my point of view is
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and it is not important to
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growth. In conclusion, preschool is a place where kids
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to
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a
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from is not
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lifelong. What we get as teenagers will influence most
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young
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souls to
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the
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life
goals.
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