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Studying art in school improves students' performance in other subjects, because it is easier for multi-skilled students to learn new things. That's why art should be obligatory in schools. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some believe that adding
art
 to the school curriculum will improve student performance in other subjects. The reason for
this
 belief is
art
 makes
students
 multi-skilled to learn new things. I partially agree with
this
 statement, I believe learning
art
 will defenatiley add an advantage to the
students
 but it should be an individual choice and not a burden to them. on the one hand, Learning
art
 will increase the creativity and intellectual thinking of people. That's why studying
art
 in high
schools
 helps to make
students
 multi-talented. So, they can adopt new things easily.
For example
, learning drawing needs
an
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lot
attention
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 and much detailing. If
this
 drawing learning procedure is applied to learn other things they can achieve it very easily and quickly. So,
schools
 should include
art
 as a subject.
on the other hand
, what student study in
schools
 will give options for them what they want to learn. It completely depends on the individual choice.
However
, of ,course elementary level
students
 do not have much knowledge of what they study.
Therefore
, we have to teach
art
 to some extent. Later, in high
schools
art
 should be an elective.
Moreover
, not all
students
 have the same level of IQ. so, they may feel burdened to them to learn the
art
.
To conclude
,
schools
 have an
art
 subject in school, but it should be elective.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Critical thinking
  • Motor skills
  • Creativity
  • Perspectives
  • Emotional outlet
  • Cultural appreciation
  • Global awareness
  • Historical art movements
  • Spatial intelligence
  • Curriculum overload
  • Non-competitive
  • Exposure
  • Cross-disciplinary benefits
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