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the bar chart shows the top 10 countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

the bar chart shows the top 10 countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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The bar graph illustrates the top ten countries for making and usage of electricity in the year 2014. The consumption and production of the current are measured in
billion
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 (
kWh
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) units.
Overall
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, the ranking of countries is as followed
firstly
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 by China,
then
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 the United States, Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and
lastly
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 Korea republic. The utilized and manufactured energy is represented with two different colours in the graph. Generation and exhaustion of power took the highest place in China respectively (5,398 and 5,322
billion
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kWh
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) which are quite close.
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, Korea remained the lowest in the 2 sectors by (485.1 and 449.5
billion
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kWh
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). The US stood second with the greatest of all the other nations with (4,099 and 3,866
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kWh
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). Moving towards the other 7 nations they got placed after the US
accordingly
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 Russia with (1,057 and 1,038), Japan (936.2 and 856.7), India (871 and 698.8), Canada (618.9 and 499.9), France (561.7 and 462.9), Brazil (530.7 and 455.8) and in the end Germany with making of electricity (526.6) and wastage by (582.5
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kWh
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).
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • top 10 countries
  • production
  • consumption
  • overview
  • compare
  • significance
  • data
  • electricity
  • regional differences
  • factors
  • influence
  • analyze
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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