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We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some
people
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 believe
countries
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 must prioritise their own advantage above helping other
countries
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. I cannot find any sense in
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 idea, and I completely disagree. First of all, there are a lot of factors that determine the
quality
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 of a person's
life
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 just based on where they stand on the geographical map, and nobody gets the chance to choose the circumstances that cover their place of birth,
such
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 as medical facilities, the education
system
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, and most of all, the food supplies. All these things lead to inequalities among the
world
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's
citizens
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, waste the huge potential power of humans, and perpetuate a cycle of suffering and disadvantage that could easily be alleviated by prioritising aid to
countries
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 in need.
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, greed and selfishness are considered sins in too many cultures and religions;
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, helping others is not a
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 of choice when we think about it; helping, in fact, is our role to keep improving the
world
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's
nations
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, and to keep each nation productive and prosperous in the economic
system
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 which may result in referring to the trading moves around the
countries
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.
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, Egypt in the early 1900s was a significant cotton producer, and international trade helped to boost its economy, ensuring that its
citizens
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 had access to an improved
quality
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 of
life
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.
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, supporting struggling
nations
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 today may lead to future economic benefits and improved standards of living for those in need. In conclusion, I cannot accept ignoring or pretending not to notice the rising number of impoverished and unprivileged
people
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 around the globe, and I truly believe helping them is an ethical
matter
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 before it is an economic one. Some
people
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 believe
countries
Use synonyms
 must prioritise their own advantage above helping other
countries
Use synonyms
. I cannot find any sense in
this
Linking Words
 idea, and I completely disagree. First of all, there are a lot of factors that determine the
quality
Use synonyms
 of a person's
life
Use synonyms
 just based on where they stand on the geographical map, and nobody gets the chance to choose the circumstances that cover their place of birth,
such
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 as medical facilities, the education
system
Use synonyms
, and most of all, the food supplies. All these things lead to inequalities among the
world
Use synonyms
's
citizens
Use synonyms
, waste the huge potential power of humans, and perpetuate a cycle of suffering and disadvantage that could easily be alleviated by prioritising aid to
countries
Use synonyms
 in need.
Secondly
Linking Words
, greed and selfishness are considered sins in too many cultures and religions;
therefore
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, helping others is not a
matter
Use synonyms
 of choice when we think about it; helping, in fact, is our role to keep improving the
world
Use synonyms
's
nations
Use synonyms
, and to keep each nation productive and prosperous in the economic
system
Use synonyms
 which may result in referring to the trading moves around the
countries
Use synonyms
.
For example
Linking Words
, Egypt in the early 1900s was a significant cotton producer, and international trade helped to boost its economy, ensuring that its
citizens
Use synonyms
 had access to an improved
quality
Use synonyms
 of
life
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.
Similarly
Linking Words
, supporting struggling
nations
Use synonyms
 today may lead to future economic benefits and improved standards of living for those in need. In conclusion, I cannot accept ignoring or pretending not to notice the rising number of impoverished and unprivileged
people
Use synonyms
 around the globe, and I truly believe helping them is an ethical
matter
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 before it is an economic one.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global interconnectivity
  • international cooperation
  • ethics
  • moral obligation
  • geographical borders
  • diplomatic relations
  • economic stability
  • global security
  • resource allocation
  • expertise
  • international aid
  • dependency and development
  • sustainable solutions
  • local and global initiatives
  • community resilience
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