The graph illustrates the number of birth which happens from 1920 till 2020 in China and in the USA

The graph illustrates the number of birth which happens from 1920 till 2020 in China and in the USA
This
line chart depicts the figure of born from 1920 till 2020 in different countries which are China and
USA
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. It is clear from the graph that, both of the nations fluctuated, in the beginning, starting from approximately the same number.
According to
what is shown
firstly
, China showed some fluctuation from 1920 to 1940 and
then
remained for a year.
Furthermore
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the number of birth increased until it reached the highest level at 20 per cent which was the highest rate in both countries and
following
this
it hit the less point at just under 5%.
Secondly
,
USA
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the beginning was the same as in China
however
, it decreased
in addition
to hitting a low of around 5 per cent
moreover
increased by 10 per cent and
then
slightly dropped to just over 6%. In
conclusion
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we can say that the birth rates were rising starting from 1920 to 1950 except in 1945 and
then
declined after that.
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