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The chart shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops opening in a country from 2011 to 2018.

The chart shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops opening in a country from 2011 to 2018.
The given chart shows how many shops were opened and closed in one specific country in a
priod
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period
 of 7 years from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of closed shops was more in most of the
period
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expect
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except
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 for 2015 in which the
number
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 of
closures
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 dropped gradually.
In
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 the beginning of the
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period
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 the
number
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 of openings was
abaout
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about
 6,500
while
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 the
number
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 of
closures
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 was considerably higher than the openings, almost 8500. the
number
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 of
closures
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 is higher in the entire
period
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 until it reaches the
year
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 2015 and experiences a drop to almost 500 which makes the openings
number
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 of 4000 the dominant group in that
year
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, the
number
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 of
closures
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however
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rise
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rises
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 to nearly 5000 in the next
year
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, 2016 which is 4500 more than the previous
year
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 and
this
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 makes the closed stores the dominant factor until the end of the
period
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, 2018.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, period, closures, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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