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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important to read or watch news presented by people whose views are different from your own than it is to read or watch news presented by those whose views are similar to your own. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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There is plenty of information from different resources in our world nowadays.
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,
people
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 have an opportunity to share their opinion with others which leads to arguments because of
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 mindsets of individuals. From my point of view, I agree that it is essential to gain various ways of thinking about the same situation since it helps to look at a new side. Your own opinion is based on a previous experience or one of
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people
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,
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, sometimes looking at new prospectives is really helpful. There were tons of cases when
people
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 were affected by propaganda or another negative type of
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influence.
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, individuals suffered from their decisions based on
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incorrect knowledge.
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, by listening or watching
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a contrast
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contrast
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way
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 of thinking you could realise that your position was wrong or even meaningless.
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, the best way of making
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the
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 right decision is to gain as much data as possible.
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,
vast
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a vast
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 amount of young
people
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 have no idea what they want to do in
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 future life and they could be influenced by parents who may recommend them the incorrect path for the future.
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, there are many cases when teenagers are obsessed with art or being a singer but relatives encourage them not to choose that way and convince children to get more common,
regular
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a regular
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job
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such
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 as
an
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apply
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economist or
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doctor. In conclusion, I definitely persuade
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you that
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 having two different
prospectives
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perspectives
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 is crucial for making
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the right
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 decisions or not
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being
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 fooled by mean
people
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.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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