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The pie graph show the nutrional consistency of two dinners

The pie graph show the nutrional consistency of two dinners
The pie graphs illustrate the way nutrients are distributed in two dishes for dinner: medium baked
potato
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 and
macaroni
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.
Overall
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, it can be noticed that both dinners have the highest proportion of carbohydrates.
Besides
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, the medium baked
potato
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 includes the least level of fat. As can be seen, the percentage of carbohydrates in
macaroni
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 makes up 52% which is 17% more than that in the baked
potato
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 dish. Meanwhile, saturated fat contributes to 21% of
macaroni
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 and
this
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 figure is nearly twice as much as that of the dinner including
potato
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.
According to
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 the two given pie graphs, the second dominant nutrient in baked
potato
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 belongs to protein accounting for 25%,
while
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 that in
macaroni
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 only halves.
In addition
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, the amount of glucose in
macaroni
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 is the same as that of protein in
this
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 dish. The share of glucose in the medium baked
potato
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 is 4% more than that in
macaroni
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words potato, macaroni with synonyms.
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