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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out bout the history of the house or building they live in.

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Compared with the past, cities are bigger and bigger,
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 the number of buildings has increased.
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, the methods of buying a house have dramatically changed all over the world. These days, people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the building they live. There are three explanations and I will discuss
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 in
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 article. The first and most important reason for knowing the history, the neighbour, and the
area
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 where you want to buy and live is essential to know that the
area
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 is safe.
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, the family has children and the children want to buy from a supermarket or they should be alone in an apartment.
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, a safe
area
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 is important and you have to make sure before you buy. The second reason
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 important to know is whom you buy apartments from
who
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. Because you would like to know how personality they have, they take care of place or not and what are advantages and disadvantages of
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 place.
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 reason is that society is more curious about designers, architects, engineers and
who
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those who
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 try to build than before.
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, some apartments are expensive and when you are curious about that, you
figured
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 out who built it a famous person that's why you have to pay more money. So you can make a decision after you know everything about a place.
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, some people think that asking many questions
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 takes time but
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 should pay more money in some situations which means to liver better
area
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.
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, it well_worth. Because you are sure that you and your family are safe. In conclusion, for buying a new house you have to pay more attention and find out information about where they want to take and live.
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