The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries

The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries
The table diagram illustrates the differences in percentages of the population aged 65 and older in Canada,
Germany
and the
UK
from 1988 to 2030.
Overall
,
that is
clear that
Germany
is a total leader.It had the highest numbers and predictably will do it again.The following county is Canada,which in all years had a number smaller than
Germany
's by about 4 per cent.The outsider to the table is the
UK
.
Due to
,
this
Its numbers were and will be sharply lower than others. In 1988
Germany
had 20.45.
while
Canada had a little bit lower number 16.32.,
However
in the next mark, the year they both rose by about 4 points.Predictions tell that they will continue to grow and will increase by 4 per cent again. The
last
and the least country,the
UK
,in the apply beginning had 14.23,which is notable.
Moreover
,in 2000,
while
the other two counties had a good rise,the
UK
grew only by 0.66 per cent.
However
,predictions show that it will surge in 2030 to 20.35 percentage
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage change
  • population
  • aged 65 and above
  • information
  • table
  • data
  • trends
  • patterns
  • comparison
  • predicted
  • future
  • findings
  • comment
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