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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society.Other,however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

#people #parents #children #members #society #school #place
Being well in society is the main quality of good human beings.The idea of teaching
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children
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the teacher
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teacher
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 responsibility to teach students about
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good manners towards
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where as
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,
few
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 thought that its
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parents
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responsibilities
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this
 essay, I would highlight both views and my opinions towards that. There are various aspects that
parents
 should teach to be
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good
member
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.
Firstly
, As
parents
 are the 1st teachers of every child
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since
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 birth
upto
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up to
5 years
children
 are with family
members
 only.
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,the first words
as well as
 first steps of
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 they would
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from
parents
 so they would copy what
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parents
 would do
infront
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in front
 of them.  If they would been respectful towards
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members
as well as
 society
members
 they will
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that and emit it.
Secondly
, observing is the main factor through which
child
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develop behaviour towards society
members
.One famous psychologist, Albert Bandura, told that each and every child learns social behaviour from observation.so through the family culture , background, traditions and behaviour towards others we would learn.
On the other hand
, for more than 8 hours a day,
children
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 their time in school. So, it's
teacher's
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 responsibility to teach them good manners.
Furthermore
, nowadays both
parents
 are too busy with their work and they do not have much time to take
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care
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 of them so they have sent them to the hostel so teachers would be there for more than 12 hours with them.So, there is no other option to
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 them good manners other than teachers.
Additionally
, since 2year kids are going to kindergarten nowadays
due to
 the busy schedules of family
members
. In conclusion, In my opinion, both
organization
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 and
parents
 and equal responsibility to make
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good people. But,
Parents
 are the primary organization of the
children
 during the learning phase they are the family only so
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parent's
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 role is important.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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