The personal information of many individuals is held by large internet companies and organisations. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent years, with the development of
information
technology, when users use some applications or social networking sites,
the
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personal
information
of them is held by many internet companies or organizations. One of the controversial questions is whether the advantages of
this
issue outweigh the disadvantages or not. In my viewpoint, there are more disadvantages than
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advantages that
this
problem can bring.
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as well as
drawbacks to support my opinion. No one can deny the fact that taking access to
information
technology is for granted.
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advanced society, the number of individuals using the internet is increasing.
As a result
, the
loss
of private
information
is an inevitable aspect and
people
have to accept it.
Besides
, the fact that companies and organizations have
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information
helps them to provide better services
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to
this
, many
people
think that
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problem is
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a disadvantage for individuals. Many barriers to wider IT access
such
as the
loss
of privacy. Because the wide use of
information
about one’s habits, interests, location, name,
phone
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number, to name a few will make
people
worry and they will not feel comfortable when using any services including providing personal
information
.
Moreover
, nowadays, many companies use
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private data for the wrong purpose because they want to make a profit from it.
As a consequence
, many
people
, especially the elderly lost their property and are disturbed because of the
loss
of their
information
. From what has been discussed above, we may draw the conclusion that the
loss
of personal
information
brings more drawbacks than its advantages. It is a significant problem that society
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to tackle
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