In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some countries are spending
much
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money
for
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high-speed rail,I believe that the
money
should go toward upgrading transportation systems that already exist because they have a greater effect economically and
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on people
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people
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daily
lives
. In
this
case, fast trains can be a key economic in
transportation
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sector.
This
is because
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allow
people
to travel as much as possible
due to
lower prices than flights and in a much shorter time than traditional trains, inexpensive travel can encourage
people
to visit other cities. Injecting vast sums of
money
into the local
economics
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.
However
, I think there might be a little demand for some routes and those unprofitable ones could make it hard for governments to pay off the debt, which could prevent them from investing in other projects to improve the
economics
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.
On the other hand
, public transport that already
exist
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plays an essential role in
people
’s daily
lives
. Many
people
use fast trains only occasionally but take
a buses
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or
subway
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every day, making them an indispensable part of their daily
lives
.
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, the problems with delays and overcrowding in Jakarta subways are resolved,
many
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Jakaratans can
arrived
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at work on time in a better mood.
Therefore
, I think improving existing public transport will be worth the
money
. In conclusion, even though building fast train networks might be good for
economy
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the economy
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,
i
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think the
money
would be better spent on the improvement of existing public transport systems because they play a more important role in
people
’s everyday
lives
.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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