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The picture below shows the production technique of red wine.

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The diagram below demonstrates the manufacture of red
wine
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, red
wine
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 was made by ten steps to process
grapes
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.
Grapes
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 were harvested and fermented for about half or two years to enough quality and could be bottled. In the beginning, the fruit was harvested and selected and kept at the right temperature and separated from oxygen for 2-3 weeks. After that,
grapes
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 were crushed by a crushing device and moved to the pot ale to start fermentation with skin. In
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 step, some
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 was running out and both skin and stems of
grapes
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 would be put in the drainer to press and the
juice
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 was running again. The fermentation would be started the second time when you put the
grapes
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juice
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 in another pot of ale. After a period of time, the
juice
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 was filtered in the machine to make
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juice
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 clean and clarified before moving to the oaken cask. It was brewed in an oak can for a half of year or it makes up to 24 months. After the maturation was completed, some spices
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 as acid, sugar or some taste adjustment were added to make red
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 had a signature taste. In the
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 step , red
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 was bottled and finished
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 process.

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