Children are engaged in different kind of paid works. Many of people consider it inappropriate and many think it as a learning experience for taking responsibility? Give your opinion and views at the statement.

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Nowadays, the young are busy with various types of paid

work

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.mostly masses take it as inappropriate and some opine it as a study understanding for taking responsibilities.I want to discuss both sides before giving a final conclusion. To commence with,why do individuals observe doing paid

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in a bad manner

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working for

money

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at an early age not only distract children from their study but

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encourage them to run for

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money

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their whole life.

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,it is clearly manifested in the IT sector where many young doing

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in order to earn

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without

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interest.

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,all students do not have the same capabilities for doing

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and studying both at the same time and if someone started doing

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early it was very difficult for them to make a concentration on their studies. Despite the fact,we have discussed a plethora of detrimental effects of paid internships but doing jobs

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teenagers exhibits some positive effects

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such

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as working for wealth at

young

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age aids to improve

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knowledge about

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and

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defines their value.

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these,a large amount of

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able to pay for their

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education and

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children have

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only the option as

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to arrange

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,giving efforts for making

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from childhood helps to enhance

to enhance

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the skills,

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used in upcoming future to perform well in

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job. In conclusion,

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unpaid has

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interfare

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study of children.

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A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

243 words

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Children are engaged in different kind of paid works. Many of people consider it inappropriate and many think it as a learning experience for taking responsibility? Give your opinion and views at the statement.

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In some countries, many people do not have enough money to access the internet. Should governments be responsible for ensuring that everyone can get access to the internet?

Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disargee?

Some people think that learning news from newspapers is the best way. Others, however, say that there are more effective ways of learning news from other media. Discuss both points of view and give your opinions

Task 2- Childhood obesity is an increasing problem in Australia as many as two thirds of children are now obese. Schools have a responsibility to monitor what their students eat and the amount of exercise they do. To what extend do you agree to this statemen