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The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.
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The map illustrates, the overview of a
school
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 in 2004 and the future
plan
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 for the
school
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 site in 2024.
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, There is a great
changes
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change
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 in the infrastructure of the
school
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, Compare to 2004, now students are double
from
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the previous ratio.
however
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 the environment has
no
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not
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changes
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changed
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, still they are maintaining the trees as it is in 2004.
Highlightes
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 of the new
cite
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site
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have
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 multiple car parking provided. To start with the students, In 2004 only 600 students were in the
school
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, But in 2024 1000
pupiles
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pupils
 are there. Next is
carparking
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car parking
, Only one is available
in
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on
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 north westside but in
new
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the new
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plan
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,plan
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 they added car parking 2 on
northeast
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the northeast
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 side. In
2004
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the 2004
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 map main entrance has direct access to
school
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bulding
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building
 1,
2
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and 2
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and
sports
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the sports
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field
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 but in the current
plan
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, they
cutdown
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 the
pathyway
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pathway
. The major change is, there is only 2
school
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bulding
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buildings
 located. But in the future
plan
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school
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 building3 added in the place were
sport
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sports
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field
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 present.
Sport
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Sports
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field
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 shifted to
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the eastside
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eastside
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east side
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 and
size
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the size
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 of the
field
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 become 1/3rd of
old
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the old
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 one. The road extended till car parking 2.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, plan, field with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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