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You are leaving a job and coming back to your hometown. Write a letter to your friend and say : 1. What is the reason for your leaving 2. What do you plan to do 3. Where an when will you meet your friend to discuss it?

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Dear Richa, Hope you are doing well . I have a piece of great news to share with you . As you know
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 am currently doing a
job
 in a pizza restaurant in New Delhi , but I have given my resignation letter to my manager one month prior to leaving
this
job
 .
Therefore
 , I am coming home at the beginning of next month . The first and foremost reason to terminate
this
job
 is
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 of my interest in
this
job
 .
Moreover
 , it is not related to my study field ,
therefore
 it will not be going to add any professional value to my resume . About my plans after leaving
this
job
 , I have already applied for the position of supervisor in the Green Nursery on the outskirts of our city and more importantly
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they have already selected my name for an interview in the first week of the next month because my major was in botany .
Therefore
 , they were very interested in my profile . I have heard from my mother that you are coming to New Delhi the day after tomorrow. So, we will meet at my apartment because
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I have my day off on that day . To be honest , I am very eager to see you and tell you about each and everything in detail . Hoping to see you soon . Your friend, Deva
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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