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Traffic congestion is becoming a huge problem for many major cities. Why is this case? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce traffic in big cities.

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Many countries nowadays
is
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 facing big problems because of
traffic
congestion
,
this
 is because
to
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too
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 many
cars
 on the road and we can solve
this
 problem to encourage
people
 to ride
a public
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public transport
a means of public transport
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transport
. One of
primary
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the primary
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 reason
of
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for
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 the surge
of
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in
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traffic
congestion
,
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 is
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that
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the
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that
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cars
 nowadays is cheaper compared to before, so
people
 can easily buy
car
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a car
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 nowadays. Another reason is petrol is cheaper so
people
 travel everywhere and used
there
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cars
 almost
everyday
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every day
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, even if
the
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they
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 have the choice to ride
with
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apply
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the
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apply
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public
transport
. I suggest that
government
 should think of
the
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a
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 plan to make the road
and
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wide and bigger so that
cars
 will not congest
in
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the highway,
Secondly
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,Secondly
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government
 should separate
cars
 and
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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 and
bicycle
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bicycles
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, they should make bicycle and motorcycle
lane
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lanes
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,
its
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it's
it is
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 a big help to ease the
traffic
also
.
People
also
 have discipline when they drive
there
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their
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car
,
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 because some
car
 owner is they don't follow
traffic
 sign and
no
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not
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 discipline on the road, it is the reason
also
 that cause
congestion
,
In addition
,
government
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the government
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 should upgrade the public
transport
 to entice
people
 to not to ride
there
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their
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car
 and ride the public
transport
instead
. Make some train and bus
fare
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fares
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 more affordable to
people
, in
this
 way it can reduce
congestion
 and give
pepole
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people
 the option to drive public
transport
 and not on
there on
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their own
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car
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the car
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. In conclusion,
government
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the government
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 should plan and create a good
traffic
 management plan and
also
 make public
transport
 affordable to all.
However
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,However
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people
 should cooperate and always follow simple
traffic
 rules to help ease the
congestion
.
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