Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation.

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Artists
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like many creative
people
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should work hard to earn money.
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, some of them become millionaires
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others become poor
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with lack of food.
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, from my
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the
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should not help
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the artist
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artist
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artists
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with , the income of
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artists
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hinges on individuals who are
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in their es masterpieces.
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,
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could be talented and gifted but if
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did not like their work
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will not become wealthy and famous
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why they do not have a permanent
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artists
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do not have
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monthly
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. Meanwhile , one painting could cost millions of dollars and
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amount of money could ensure
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life. As I mentioned before everything depends on public opinion. Even, sometimes
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become popular and famous after their death. It is often suggested that the
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should be responsible for
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and investment
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art and
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statement. Art is not a profitable thing.
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it cannot yield money.
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does
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not have any interest to invest
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artists
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reason ,
artists
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have to try to enhance
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their
recognition by themselves.
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, they can create their Instagram accounts and show their
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works
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.
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, they should take part in different exhibitions. All
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these things they need to do in order to find fans that will admire their
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and will be ready to buy their
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,
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depend on public opinion and I reckon they need to adjust to it.
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, the
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does not have an obligation to invest
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their
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works
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. So , we cannot force
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mean
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should rely on themselves
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • income disparity
  • struggling artists
  • market demand
  • public preference
  • government support
  • grants
  • funding
  • exhibitions
  • cultural wealth
  • societal benefits
  • market dynamics
  • government intervention
  • art market
  • public taste
  • private investment
  • balanced artistic community
  • financial assistance
  • creative industry
  • artistic merit
  • economic sustainability
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