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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates
that
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the
amount
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number
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 of enquiries
recieved
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received
 by
the
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tourist in 2011 through 3 different
medium
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mediums
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 (in person, by letter/email and by telephone) in a period of
six
months
.
Overall
 the graph shows
the
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a
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 significant increase in enquiries submitted in person. It starts from almost 400 and reached the highest level at 1900 approximately in
six
months
.
However
, the
complains
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 submitted by
the
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letter/email have
slight
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a slight
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 decrease from approximately 750 to 700 in just 3
months
 (January to March) and
then
 a drastic change can be seen from march to
may
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May
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 which is 750 to 370 approximately. It
then
 remains
same
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the same
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 in the month of
june
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June
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 The
compalint
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company
 registers through telephone calls were 900 in
january
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January
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. it
then
 fluctuated and reached
to
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1000 in
april
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April
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qand
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and
finally
 it increased to 1600 in June. Both mediums (telephone and
in person
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in-person
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)
shows
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show
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athe
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a
 significant increase in
six
months
 in the year 2011.
However
, the
complains
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complaints
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 registered through the letter/email have been decreased within
six
months
 in the same year
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words six, months with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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