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Hosting international sporting competitions is good,but few people think this causes too many problems. Explain both views and tell your opinion.

#competitions #people
This
 line chart depicts
unemployed
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the unemployed
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 people ratio in two different countries:
United
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the United
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 States and
Japan
 in March from 1994 to 1999. It is clear from the graph that,
between
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this
 country a massive number of unemployed workers.Accounting to what is shown,
to
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apply
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 beginning in
Japan
 in the first period a tiny percentage of worker forces by 2.3.After
that
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 the rate
becom
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become
becomes
increase
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increased
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 from 2.5 to 3.5 in three years from March .
Although
drop
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the drop
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 in 1996 ,
while
 become fluctuate
in
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over
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 three years. But between March 1998 and
1999
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,1999
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 the ratio of unemployment increased sharply
in
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at
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end
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the end
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 of the period.
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In other
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Other
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country
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 the per cent of workers was at 7.5 throughout the three years it
was become
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became
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 from 7.0 to 5.5. After
that
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 the proportion drop in 1995 and 1998 was the same
levelled
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 in
Japan
.
To sum up
 we could say that between 1998 to 1999
this
 country had the same period of unemployment 4.5
the
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 United States
while
 4.4
Japan
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in Japan
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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