Recently some people believe that online study is more effective than on campus while others disagree, discuss both the disadvantages and advantages of online study

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firm positive thought about
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provides online rather than in person at schools or colleges where as some inhabitants
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agree with
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benefits
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benifits
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benefits
and drawbacks of digital learning In
this
contemporary epoch ,
education
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part of everyone's life ,one must have to educate their selves
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to get
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.to discuss
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of online
study
first and foremost it saves
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time.
in addition
, subjects which are being learnt by
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visa
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online platform gives them multiple choice of tutors.
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,at the beginning of 2020 whole world was in turmoil and everyone had to stay inside the door, meanwhile, students had been given multiple choice of tutors in subjects
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they were pursuing at that time.
thus
,
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platform has been
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for all learners.
moreover
,
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has launched numerous
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master courses online which
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in
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nation.
consequently
,
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do not need to travel to other
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to get their higher
education
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,
firstly
,it affects
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students
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as a result
of
this
,as they have to
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their selves to
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while
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held by their teachers.
secondly
,those who choose to
study
online might
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their
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communication skill as they do not have to face their classmates or colleague on daily basis.
furthermore
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something via
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platform has
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disadvantage in the practical aspect of the field in which pupil
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studying.
for example
,if a person
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online
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fitness course
then
definitely he/she master himself/herself in
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aspect , though,he /she has to suffer in practical aspect in future,which might will have
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effect on performance in career.
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,
online
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study
has numerous positive impacts .
although
,one can not avoid the drawbacks of online
education
.
thus
,it is worth
to
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study
online
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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