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The diagram below shows the water supply system in Australia at present and in the future

The diagram below shows the water supply system in Australia at present and in the future
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The diagram illustrates how
water
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 is supplied in Australia currently and plans for
future
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the future
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.
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, in the upcoming days, the
water
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 supply system will be changed and will be converted into a recycling process of
water
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 for use in
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city
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the city
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. Looking at the present
water
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 supply method, pure
water
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 is stored in a dam.
Then
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 it is transferred to a
city
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 for using it in households, factories and shops. From
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city
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the city
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,
storm
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stormwater
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water
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 is
then
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 directed straight into
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water
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the water
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whereas
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waste
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wastewater
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water
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 is released in
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water
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the water
a water
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 treatment
plant
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plants
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. After
water
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being
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is
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 processed, it is
then
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 sent to
river
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the river
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. Moving forward to future
water
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 supply
technique
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techniques
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, it is evident that pure
water
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 storage in the dam and its usage in the
city
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are
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is
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 planned to remain unchanged.
However
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, in the next procedure,
waste
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wastewater
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water
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 and
storm
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stormwater
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water
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 are transmitted from
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city
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the city
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 to
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water
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the water
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 treatment plant and
here
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where
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 it is processed.
Finally
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, pure
water
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 will be recycled back
in
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into
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 the
city
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 for use. The future planning of
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water
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the water
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 supply system insures that no
water
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 will be released into the river.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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