Money should be spent on creating new public buildings such as museums or town hall rather than renovating the existing ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
New public
architectures
and existing ones are all integral parts of a sustainable city or town. I support the idea that a limited budget should be allocated to both of the above-mentioned buildings in an appropriate way.
The established or old houses witness the history of an urban area. They are living archives Fix the agreement mistake
architecture
who are telling
memorable and exciting stories in the past. Wrong verb form
that tell
In particular
, when old generations pass away, they are few of the remaining proofs that our hometown has splendid culture, history and customs. For instance
, a normal local residential community located in the Hongkou district in Shanghai has become a non-intangible cultural heritage because it saved a lot of Jewish people during World War II. Some of the refugees left China after the War, others passed away, and the municipal government refurbished the local houses to commemorate the unforgettable legend during which the heroic citizens in difficulties rescued the Jewish people's lives.
On the other hand
, newly built libraries or TV towers reflect the vibrance and development of a metropolis. They provide citizens with a friendly living environment. Take Shanghai Pudong Library as an example, it covers a large area with numerous books, magazines and newspapers in both physical and digital versions. The Library is also
equipped with the most advanced technology, such
as artificial intelligence(AI) robots. you can search for the books you want and wait for the AI robots to bring the books to your desk. Another example is Shanghai Oriental TV Tower which is as high as over 480 metres. Once a visitor stands on its top, he or she will enjoy a macro view that the existing and old buildings represent the past of the mega-city, and young skyscrapers herald the bright future. What a dynamic and promising metropolis it is!
In conclusion, the old and the old architectures
are two sides of a modern city or town, we should maintain the former and create the latter.Fix the agreement mistake
architecture
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