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In many countries, people would rather rent a house instead of buying one. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of both.

#countries #people #rent #house
Nowadays, choosing a perfect shelter to live
is
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kind
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a kind
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 of question
to
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for
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the
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many
people
.
According to
 their lifestyle
scenarios
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 some of them could find benefits in staying own
house
 and other a
rented
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onerented
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. In the megacity, 60% of
family
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families
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occuring
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occurring
 from different states. The upcoming paragraphs explained some merits and demerits with examples to support a statement on both
the
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views.
According to
 research carried out by
sensex
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, it was evaluated earlier that
atleast
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at least
 one person in a family
moving
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onto
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to
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other
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another
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 location for carrier
purpose
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purposes
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. In metropolitan cities, the cost of living is high and they might
can't
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afford a family requirement fully. In
future
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 they may shift to other places to work
according to
 their company requirement. By considering these excuses the
people
 find a tenant and get
settle
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 temporarily for some years. Since, constructed building almost all needs like motor connection, furniture and kitchen appliance has been fulfilled by
house
 owners to stay for a
while
.
Major
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 disadvantage the individual will face is one-fourth of
salary
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 should be kept asides
for
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from
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 paying rent for each month.
On the other hand
, building a new
house
 or buying a constructed
house
 resulted
into
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in
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risky
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 for
who
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those who
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were
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belong to
middle class
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middle-class
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family
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families
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 living in other cities. Generally, buying a home in cities was found advantageous because in the upcoming
days
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 the demand will
be enhance
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 by means of Urbanisation.
Hence
, some
people
 will get a
house
by
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on
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 own by paying some of
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the fund
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fund
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funds
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 to loans rather than paying
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the tenant
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tenant
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tenants
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. In case,
further
 life
want
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wants
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 to settle down in
hometown
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their hometown
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, there is
choice
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a choice
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 to sell or be
as
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apply
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a tenant to others.
Thus
, it is useful when
the
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apply
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people
having
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have
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 their own property at any location In conclusion, choosing a building as
thier
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their
 own or finding
as
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a
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 rented
house
is depends
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depends
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 upon the wealth and the health of earning person.
According to
 me,
purchase
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purchasing
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a
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an
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 apartment is found to be better savings rather than
be
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staying in the others place.
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