The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given two pie charts illustrate the proportion of regional government
expenses
in nine sectors between 2010 and 2015.
Overall
, in the first
year
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the most government
expenses
were in Education which
has
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decreased
at the end
of the initial
year
. Meanwhile, the least
expenses
were in other
expenses
sections and remain the same in both years.
According to
the data, from 2010 Education has the biggest portion of
expenses
. The government allocated
for
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this
program just about 24%.
Whereas
,
at the end
of 2015 it increased slightly became 21%. The second big percentage was Health service. The number of
this
type was 21% and decrease
about
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1% ultimately reaching 20%. Trailed by
expenses
for Pensions
in
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the earliest time Authority contributed
for
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about 19% and remain stable until the final
year
. Followed by Defence and welfare which decrease slowly
accounted
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14
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% and 13% respectively.
On the other hand
, Interest
on
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borrowing was increased and spent about 10%. The other smaller percentage, which decreased steadily
such
as ; Transport, Culture and leisure, and other
expenses
accounted for only 3% combined
at the end
of the initial
year
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words expenses, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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