Your local public library wants to make improvements to their services and facilities. In order to get ideas from the public, they have asked library users to send them suggestions in writing. Write a letter to the librarian. In your letter • describe what you like about the library • say what you don’t like • make suggestions for improvements
Dear Librarian,
I have been a member of the library for two years and ,I admire the vast variety of the collection it possesses.
Additionally
, the seamless process to reserve books saves a lot of time, not to mention
the clean environment which the staff maintains is admirable.
On the contrary
, the lack of options for children over 10 years has been an issue recently. Especially I observed that many parents had to go back disappointingly to see that they could not find extra books in some curriculum. Moreover
, the air condition malfunction near the reception also
is a huge area for
concern.
Change preposition
of
Firstly
, I would like to suggest that immediate attention should be given fixing
the AC unit. Change preposition
to fixing
In addition
to that, making a list of books which are required by schools, and there
availablity put on the website will make it more efficient.
I hope you will attend to the above matter promptly.
Regards,
Suhitha.Replace the word
their
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task achievement
To enhance the letter's clarity, you may want to specify exactly which section or category of books for children over 10 is lacking. This could help the librarian take more precise action.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that any minor grammatical errors or typos are corrected, such as missing articles or misplaced commas. For example, 'there availability' should be 'their availability'.
coherence cohesion
It would improve the logical flow of your letter if each main point were expanded slightly. For instance, mentioning specific examples of how more books for older children could be incorporated or how a broken AC has disrupted the library environment.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a polite and respectful tone, which is appropriate for the context.
task achievement
You have covered all the required points: what you like, what you don't like, and suggestions for improvements.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are well executed and contribute to the overall formal tone of the letter.