In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

These days,one of the most controversial issues around the world is obesity and poor diet in some counties,
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lead to some health problems.There are many factors that lead to
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of
unhealthy
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an unhealthy
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lifestyle.In
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some relevant examples and I will give some possible solutions to tackle
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vital issue. It is well-established fact that
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these days
people
have a more tendency to eat
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past times.The main reason is that
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because of
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tight-daily schedules they do not have
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enough time to prepare
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hygienic or healthy food, and they
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eat
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work in office buildings and they sit more than 8 hours in a day and they have no any movement or activities.All
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factors
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mentioned,can harm
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tuition of some clubs have another
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crucial issue,first of all,
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government
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duties should not be taken lightly.Because of their power to legislate,they can
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do numerous things to encourage
people
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regular exercise to reduce the risk of some
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with some appropriate tv programs and
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them
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important is to be healthy and in shape.
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,they can install some equipment all around the city or in parks, for free
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all the
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to use the
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facilities.
To sum up
,as we know,prevention is better than cure.
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should supply some facilities for
people
to encourage them to have more
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healthy
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even small steps to improve their health.I believe
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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