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In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all student can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent decades, expensive tuition fees for
universities
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 have been a hotly debated issue around the world. Some
people
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 argue that
students
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 have to pay a large amount of money for studying purposes
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 others suggest it should be free for individuals. I strongly believe that education departments ought to offer scholarship programmes to reduce the pressure of regular payment. I will discuss
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 issue by using examples to support arguments and demonstrate points.
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, it is not necessarily expensive or free for
people
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 who urge to acquire intellectual knowledge through educational institutions.
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 institutions need to obtain financial
supports
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support
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 to operate
overall
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 aspects of learning processes like professors, infrastructure, and
dormitory
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dormitories
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.
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, covering a new syllabus with technological devices for
students
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 costs a few million dollars to adopt most
of
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classrooms
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the classrooms
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 in one of the
universities
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 in South Korea.
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, as long as university executives can organise learning processes with
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enough budget,
people
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 need to pay the right amount of tuition fees.
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, educational departments should encourage
universities
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 to provide scholarships or reward systems for
students
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 to have fewer burdens in terms of finance. The circumstance will enable a number of
students
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 in poverty to engage in pedagogical institutions easily and comfortably.
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, educational department starts to offer perks and reward systems in the continent of Africa, the phenomenon allows more individuals to enrol in
universities
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 with reduced economic pressure.
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, giving them rewards would be one of the positive ways to facilitate
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motivation
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. In conclusion,
people
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 should consider what needs to be included in post-secondary schools
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 of having an argument about how much
people
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 have to pay
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 fees.
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, it does not have to be expensive or free, but, it should be
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affordable amount for
students
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 and
universities
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