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People today spend less and less time interacting with other people in their neighborhood and this has a negative impact on communities. What are the possible causes and solutions to this problem?

#people #time #neighborhood #impact #communities
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Uncommunicative generation. Nowadays,
people
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 of our World live
closed
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 to other
neighbors
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neighbours
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. Population less and less communicate in the usual way. Humans prefer to liaise online through new devices. There
many
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 reasons
of
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this
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 situation,
then
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 I will explain
crucial
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 reasons. On the one hand, is that nation more uncommunicative in real life
.
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People
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 like better to be in touch online.
This
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 way of communication is more convenient
further
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 faster.
People
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 can share photos, write messages,
in
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addition
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 communicate by video call. Unfortunately, it is not
well type
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 because it can ruin your eyes.
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Also
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 you can be shy in real life days. The second reason is employment with work. Humans have less available
time
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 with
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their job
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job
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jobs
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. They are so busy as work requires focusing a lot of
time
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. And after work, humans are so exhausted. There is
solution
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the solution
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for
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this
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 situation.
People
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 should be
together with
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nearby
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the nearby
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resident
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residents
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 on holidays, events,
at
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and at
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 least weekends. They must spend
this
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time
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 in a  happy mood with delicious home-cooked food.
This
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time
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 makes
people
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 over the moon. And they should appreciate
this
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 moment.  To draw
the
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a
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 conclusion, I can say that society should be more sociable, friendly
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also
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and also
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 hospitable. These qualities are precious.Every person should think about
this
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 global problem. Substandard relationships with
neighbors
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neighbours
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 can badly
effect
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affect
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on
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apply
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society.
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