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The best way to solve the world's environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In recent times, more and more
people
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 are concerned about the detrimental impact of
fuel
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 on their planet. Some argue that raising the price of
fuel
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 could be the most beneficial approach to tackling
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 issue.
Although
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this
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 could be helpful, I believe there are other methods, discussed in the following essay that can be taken into consideration.
To begin
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 with, it is true that rising
fuel
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 prices can act as a deterrent for some underprivileged who cannot afford to pay for them;
however
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,
people
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 still need to fill their car tanks to commute to work or take their children to school. More importantly, a great number of companies rely only on using fossil fuels as their source of
energy
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;
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, it seems more efficient methods are needed to cope with environmental challenges. Several alternative
energy
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 sources
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 as
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 wind and solar power can be used
instead
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 of fossil fuels. By using these, there will be less carbon emission and footprint in the ambient, which in turn can result in higher air quality.
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, the number of patients suffering from respiratory damage in
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 regard will be decreased to a great extent.
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, the more
people
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 tend to allocate
waste
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 processing techniques to recycle
waste
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 products, the less they dump their garbage trash in landfill sites.
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, by restoring used plastic bottles and packages, there will be less water contamination
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 the chemicals produced from them in the soil;
as a result
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,
people
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 will benefit from purer water in their life.
To sum up
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, even though imposing higher prices on
fuel
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 could be beneficial, using solar and wind
energy
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 and reusing
waste
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 products can be a more appropriate way of dealing with environmental issues.
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, it is my firm conviction that governments should implement some measures to encourage
people
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 to utilize green
energy
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 and manage family
waste
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.
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