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Some people believe that schoolchildren should be allowed to make decisions about the school rules, while others think that teachers should be responsible for making the rules. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is believed by some that kids who go to
school
 ought to be permitted to make decisions about the
school
rules
,
while
 others assert that
liability
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the liability
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 of making these
rules
 should
be belonged
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belong
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 to teachers. Children may create fair regulations about the
school
rules
 from their point of
views
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view
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 as
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a teacher
the teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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 can give more reasonable decisions and
they
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apply
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can govern the obedience of these
rules
. On one the hand, allowing schoolchildren to make decisions about the
school
rules
 may provide democratic situations for the students. They can discuss
problems
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the problems
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 and benefits
about
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of
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 the
school
 and determine the regulations by themselves. These actions help them to develop their awareness of
responsibilities
. To illustrate that, they may become more sensible in terms of cleaning and
environment
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the environment
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 of the
school
.
Thus
, taking
responsibilities
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responsibility
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 for the
school
rules
 may be beneficial for children.
On the other hand
, teachers’ management
about
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of
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 the
school
rules
 may create more concrete results in the
school
. They can observe problems and flaws
about
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in
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 the
school
 better than the
students
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student's
students'
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 thanks to their experiences. They would be better
ruling
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at ruling
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 the classes and
measure
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measuring
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 students’ obedience
for
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to
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 the
rules
.
For instance
,
as
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apply
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a
teacher
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,teacher
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they
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apply
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have a right to penalize rule-breakers or reward them for their compliance
to
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with
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 the
rules
.
Therefore
, it would be positive that teachers have
responsibility
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the responsibility
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 of the making
rules
. In conclusion, cause and examples can be multiplied with
this
 discussion.
Although
,
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apply
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 possessing
responsibilities
about
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regarding
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 the
school
rules
 is beneficial for children’s
personality
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personalities
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, in my opinion, these
responsibilities
 should be owned by teachers
due to
 their better management and experience.
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