Some people argue that the fittest and strongest individuals and teams can achieve the greatest success in sports. But other people think that success is much related to mental attitude. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Success can be achieved in many ways, but
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strongly believe that the essence of devotion and discipline, especially in sports is based on mental attitude.
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just working smart for what you want. Sport is not just based on being fit and body trained, it
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compounds the mental state you are developing throughout the process. For some people, training makes the difference, and I agree
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that, but I would
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add the fact of including a mental awareness that pushes you to upgrade your limits.
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begins to quit and it pushes you to give up, giving the impression that you targeted your limits. But
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that moment, just to be truthful, you approximately reached half of your power and right
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you need to push yourself harder. In order to achieve success in
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, you need to learn how to control your mind. Transforming the battle inside you
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a powerful motivation. The way you act on that sabotaging voice makes the difference
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ordinary to successful. Some men tend to believe that strength is the main goal, but to be honest it is
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scientifically proven that power without discipline is indeed nothing more
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a waste of resources. As people, we need to learn how to dose our energy and especially when we practice professional sports.
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, being fit and strong is not a way of
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sports
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the long way run. It is just a temporary boost. To achieve
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you have to train your mind to be successful and that begins with
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mental state.
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