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Some people think that the best way to reduce crimes is to apply longer prison sentences, other people think that there are better methods of doing so. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Nowadays,
Crime
 rates are increasing
in
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order to stop. A few citizens believe that longer prison sentences are the most effective way to decrease
crime
 scenes.
However
, Some argued that there are some other methods of giving punishments. In my opinion, strict law helps to reduce illegal activities. On the one hand, people often said that giving longer jail sentences helps to decline
crime
 scenes. First of all, implementing strict rules and regulations by the government helps a lot because, thieves fear doing illegal activities because of longer punishments so,
instead
 they prefer to earn money in some other way.
For example
, Dubai is one of the places that implemented strict laws, here if a person steals a vehicle he will be given the death penalty so,
that
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 is why these places have the least percentage of
crime
 rates.
On the other hand
, With the help of the
governments
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 they can find
an alternative ways
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alternative ways
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 to give punishments.
To begin
 with, thieves should work for the public by joining in public campaigns and cleaning the public areas
this
 will aid them a lot by improving their mannerism and there is a chance of realising their mistake
for example
, Once a thief interacts with the public he might know the feeling of other people and
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the importance
 of making money in a legal way. Implementing these activities helps them to realise
as well as
 helps to improve the society In my opinion
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