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it is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives do you think the advatages of taking risks outweight the disadvantages

#people #risks #lives #advatages #outweight
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 it is true that risky decisions may have a huge impact on their belongings which can be positive or in worse conditions negative impact,these communities have more chances to change their
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 rather those who never take any adventure to try their chance. In my point of view, if people consider logical factors in their choice , taking decisions to some extent may have more merits than demerits.
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 with, on one hand, the population who never convinced themself to take the danger probably never can have an improvement in their occupation or even their individual
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, if the owner of the company of iPhone would not accept the consequence of his resolution to drop off university , he might not achieve the accomplishment that he currently got .
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,
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 in people's
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 may be considered as a constant teacher who teaches them new things and makes them ready for all aspects of their
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, that those experiences made numerous inventors and scientists who helped the world to develop and as a ,result modern life emerge to communities from recent centuries.
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 ,may Tomas Edison fail in his work over and over since he approved the risk of failure, but at ,
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 he could invent a significant invention which changed the population's lifestyles globally.
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, taking
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 should be
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 logical criteria, not all decisions have a positive effect on societies.
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 , some of the youth adore driving at high speed and they claim they like to drive fast in the streets and they accept all its drawbacks,in
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 ,case
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 they may put their
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 and others at risk of death and in any condition can not be reasonable activity.
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, I believe accepting adventure professionally or in our personal
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 may provide plenty of opportunities that cause improvement and the importance of taking logical
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 and their benefits compared to not taking them is uncountable.
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, not all
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 are valuable to experience them, since many people lost their belongings or beloved to due accepting wrong risky actions.
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