The diagram shows how apple is canned. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant. Write at elast 150 words.

The diagram shows how apple is canned.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

Write at elast 150 words.
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This
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diagram illustrates the way of apple canning. It is clear from the graph that, there are 14 steps in the process in order to can the apple.
Firstly
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,
according to
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what is shown, at the beginning of the process, they select the apples by them self and
then
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they put them in a truck to deliver them to the factory to start the main procedure.
Secondly
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, after that
comes
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the third step which is washing
then
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the quality check and putting it in cold storage where the temperature is low.
Thirdly
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, it is weighing and grading time
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, they peril it and cut it into slices which are easier to put in cans
furthermore
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, canning and
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cooking and sterilization where they use polling to the apple.
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, the labelling
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to the storage and in order to dispatch it which is the
last
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phase of the process.
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